Tuesday, November 2, 2010

I HATE IT




I’m a good girl who eats her vegetables. In fact, I really like them. Still there is on that I absolutely can’t stand the taste of Brussels sprouts. You know those things that look like heads of lettuce, except in a mine version. They taste horrible. I’d rather eat soap. I didn’t know food could taste so horrible until that peace of garbage sat on my plate. It was something new and I was glad to try it. I took a bite and made a (I hate this) face. I didn’t spit it out because I didn’t want to offend the cook. I was at my best friend (at that time we were best 
Brussels sprouts are evil 
friend but were not now because we just lost contact). I could have told her I didn’t like the Brussels sprouts, but she would have taken it the wrong way and just assumed that I was talking about her cooking. So instead I aced like I was coking on my food, then as I was moving around act as if I was choking I, rubbed my eves so they could turn red so that it could actually seemed as if I easy choking. Then when I was finish and spat out the Brussels sprouts, I was asked if I was ok. I told her my thought hurt, and could I be excused, she let me off the hook. I then decided, that no matter what, I would never let that disgusting green pieces of food come in to 2inches of my mouth again. I feel sorry for people who are forced by their parent to eat Brussels sprouts, and am glad my mother doesn’t make me eat thing that she knows I can’t stand. 

1 comment:

  1. ][_, ][_][ ][_,!!! the evil brussel sprouts.
    Anywho,

    'is on that' one, and I suggest adding "vegetable" after it.
    "that I absolutely can’t stand[:] the taste of Brussels sprouts." Suggest colon.
    'except in a mine version' take out in, change mine to 'mini'
    ' sat on my plate' went into my mouth? I didnt know you could taste food by it sitting there. lol
    'bite and made a (I hate this) face.' no need for parentheses. Use dashes 'I-hate-this face.'
    'I was at my best friend(at' try friends's house before the parantheses.
    'So instead I aced[act] like I was coking[choking] on my food [.],[Then] then as I was moving around[,][I] act as if I was choking I[and], rubbed my eves so they could turn red so[to make it seem] that it [I was literally choking.] could actually seemed as if I easy choking.' This part created some confusion. I'll clarify the trouble spots by inserting this "[" in the text to make things clearer.
    'and could I ' "asked if I could be...."
    'let that' those instead of that
    'in to 2inches' delet "to" and spell out "two incehs"
    'parent' suggest you say it as this parent(s).
    'thing' things

    Overall, good story plot. Perhaps I shall say, story development. Kept me interested. I want you to write somemore to this one. Wait-no! Don't. Instead, write a yaoi story on your blog.

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